Sunday, November 2, 2008

Natural abuse

These are some of my attempts... still not sure that I got it.

Take 1:
Virgin land untouched
Pure green surroundings
Slowly falls apart

Take 2:
A virgin landscape
Tainted, greedy wants and needs
Disposed nothingness

Take 3:
A virgin landscape
Now tainted by greedy hands
Disposed emptiness

Take 4:
Our virgin landscapes
Now tainted by dirty hands

Take 5
Our virgin landscapes
Now tainted by corrupt minds
Emptiness remains

Take 6
Virgin land untouched
Now clear cut devastation
It’s gone forever

Take 7
Virgin land untouched
Everywhere devastation
It’s gone forever

2 comments:

Ares said...

haiku! hey, but why does the fourth verse only have two lines?

Carrie Amie said...

Right!

Cause it started out as a haiku but then I didn't like where it was going so then I was just playing with words :)